Monday, March 14, 2011

magpie tales: violet

photo courtesy of tess kincaid

Her name was Violet. She should have been pale and fragile, dark hair framing a face with a little pointed chin and huge eyes, “limpid pools,” as the old romantics would say. But she wasn’t. Not any of those things. She was tall and large-boned, and hearty. Her mouth was too wide and her laugh too loud. She was apt to say odd things in public places.

 She would have chosen Penthesilea, if it was up to her. The Amazon woman killed by Achilles. They could have called her “Pen,” for short, and she would have liked that. As it was, her boss called her “Vi,” which she hated, and her mother called her “Letty,” which was even worse. 

Perhaps she would change it when she was 21.


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30 comments:

Kathe W. said...

nicely done! I enjoyed this little tidbit- wonder what she'll change her name to?

Olivia said...

Stunning!! I love the color!!
Hugs xx

Kim Nelson said...

She was tall and large-boned, and hearty. Her mouth was too wide and her laugh too loud. She was apt to say odd things in public places...
This could be me!!!
Nice piece.

S. Etole said...

more, please ....

Emily Young said...

Maybe she'll grow to like it when she gets older.

Loree said...

I love your little piece. It could be the start of a wonderful story.

120 Socks said...

The opening would be wonderful opening lines for a novel.

Kay L. Davies said...

Beautifully done, Leslie.
If she were in a street gang, she could change her name to Violent. (No pun on this season of the church calendar intended.)
-- K

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

Words A Day said...

So true, thats exactly the winsome pointy chin persona the name Violet seems to evoke in some (most!) fiction, not here though! Go Pen!

Elaine said...

Maybe she'll change her name when she's older, but you don't have to change a thing here. This is perfect!

Tumblewords: said...

I loved this and hope she does change her name, just because. :)

rebecca said...

love love love!
sequel please...

Rick said...

Lovely, Leslie - the photo and the story ! More to come ?

Arian Tejano said...

love how you weave in that allusions.

Can do mom said...

Love the photo and the story! :)

Tess Kincaid said...

I like her!

Nanka said...

Nicely done and enjoyed it!! Beautiful!!

Misty said...

lovely, leslie.
and i love the nomme de plume! :)

Helen said...

No changing ~~ she is going to grow into that beautiful name.

LauraX said...

so interesting the way one may or may not love their name... somehow as we age, we grow into them despite ourselves.

Well done, Les!

Martin H. said...

Nice one. Sometimes it's impossible to live up to a name.

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Terena said...

I love this!!!!! And the site looks really good. When I have more time (next week!), I'll read more of the posts

Margaret Pangert said...

Leslie, this beginning of a novel is fabulous! Well-written; interesting how we don't know right away that the narrator is a child. The painting is a nice accompaniment!

♥ w o o l f ♥ said...

MORE.
now i understand your time off!
you will be sitting in the sun (hopefully) scribbling down manually the sequel to this beautiful, enticing start!
serious, leslie, i mean it. write!
(no, truthfully? i hope you're fine, yeah?)
n♥

Isabel Doyle said...

ah yes - the conflict between the dreams of the namer and the self of the namee - always felt I should have a name like Helga or Boudiccea myself - something war-like!

B. Meandering said...

This is quite a creative spin on that picture! I can picture 'her'--and feel her dissatisfaction with her name. I bet she will change it; then again maybe she'll grow into her 'depiction' of it.
You could do a running story line on this.:)

natsumi nishizumi said...

I love the colors. Flower always makes me feel better..

Thank you so much for your comment on my blog.

~T~ said...

Names are powerful. It's tough to only have one shot at getting one right. I met a red-haired baby named Ginger--what if her hair color changes? You never know.

Nice character sketch!

Lena said...

Titles are strange, strange things. Thank goodness for Deed Poll!

Carrie Burtt said...

Love this Joy! :-)